Спасибо за чтение!
A very interesting beginning. The exposition at the beginning gives background information in a smart way to the reader, setting up the premise. Then there's a break and we get introduced to the new family inside the palace. At the end there's a lovely cliffhanger. A few editing errors, but great
Good background infromation at the beginning, intriguing! The issues are, the punctuation and grammar, the worrying thing about this story is that with the poor grammar it makes the book feel rushed. Like: Commas after an elepsis, 4 periods as the ellepsis with a comma is not a punctaution mark in an english language. This story would need more descriptions, and what the characters look like apart from only describing their dress. But a very gripping beginning.
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