"We need to plan for Jenna and Jay's birthday."Edna says as she shuffled the cards."They're only turning one why so soon."Eric asks as he is dealt his hand.
"I don't want the snob mums judging me.And now that the president lifted the curfew we don't have choice but to invite them."she added.
"Right! right!we should be heading home I'm sure Sharon has put the twins to bed."he suggested but she shook her head.
"We have to get the signal if they see us they'll refuse to sleep."she added.This attractive couple in this bliss have two children.
They own the restaurant they are sitting in called "The Mix experience."
"Alright we can go now."She says once she checks her phone and the man nods getting up to get her coat.They lock up and walk with her arm locked on his.
"I think people like the Oreo and gummy bear ice-cream topping."he tells her as they get to their apartment building.
"Well it's better than the mix of omena and chicken those one do not work together."she adds as the lift stops and they get off.
Only at this junction do we see the couple pull apart and go into different apartments.Thats because the two are divorced.
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The start is a bit confusing. The spacing isn't quite correct and in between quotation marks are missing. There are too many names that are given at the same time and it's not really clear whose children are meant - the man's? His with another woman? It doesn't feel like they're a couple anyway
This chapter was great. It was more structured and now it's clearer who the children are. This is an interesting twiste to have the protagonist be friendly with her ex and a new potential love interest. The beginning of the chapter is cute and the end, with the cliffhanger, intriguing. Good job!!
Nice! And good to find a story talking about a patchwork family that works. The flashback is a very interesting memory and we finally get a bit of exposition about the start of the relationship between E & E. There are still editting problems, but in total, the story reads easily and is interesting
Oh, this was a lovely surprise! Now we're hearing and seeing things from Eric's point of view. It was very interesting and new to learn what Eric thinks about Edna. And how he still appreciates her and sees the good that she's brought into his life. His new girlfriend seems to do him well too- sweet
Darren sounds so nice! Hopefully Edna migth give him a chance after all. This chapter gave us more exposition about her and Darren, letting us know that she found him attractive before and that they've known each other for a while. The story jumps a bit - we don't know what became of Eric's memory
This was so sweet. How Eric wants Edna to be happy and that a part of him doesn't want to move on if she isn't at least also at least moving on as well. Cindy seems to also be really understanding. A modern story about a modern patchwork family - this story is just getting better and better
Cindy is so sweet and understanding. And in this chapter, we can understand Edna's turmoil - on the one hand longing to be a woman, but on the other hand feeling responsible for her children and thinking that she can only fulfil this role properly if she sacrifices everything else. Very well written
This chapter gives insight into the daily lives of Edna and Eric. And again the disparity between male and female: while she wants to dedicate her time to be a great mother, he doesn't take their mutual job seriously, has fun and, even though the text doesn't say it, prioritizes the children less.Hm
This was an interesting chapter that gave insight into the business relationship between the former couple. And again, of how Eric got his way, but Edna had to beg him for his help. Eric is becoming less and less likeable from chapter to chapter. Edna is described as a hardworking person.Cliffhanger