Gracias por leer!
I would have preferred if there had been paragraphs, because that way it would have been easier to have read through the text. I believe a bit more description (what does the house looklike?) would have been good. That being said, I like the idea, the cliffhanger at the end and the setting
Creepy!! Again, it might make the story a little more visual if you added in more of the scenery (how does the sister look, what does she do with her hands when she cries - does she whimmer, is it high, does she whisper, is she panicky?), but the pace picked up well and yet another cliffhanger. Good
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